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Ben Ames-McCrimmon's avatar

Absolutely thrilling! Your use of dramatic devices to draw the reader in is really superb stuff!

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James Hart's avatar

Thank you, Ben, I really appreciate that! Might not hold a candle to, say, George MacDonald, but he’s definitely an influence and so I try to do what I can. :)

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Ben Ames-McCrimmon's avatar

I could tell by your loose rhyme scheme! ABCB all the way!!

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Johan L. Rocha's avatar

This was great! I had been anticipating it since your first post about it, and had such a great experience listening to it. I loved the sound effects, especially since I was listening to it while having a walk on Halloween. Thank you for this gift!

As always, your craftsmanship is on full display, but what I found interesting about this poem is that while I expected it to be set in the past, or a mythical place, you set it in the present. For me, this highlighted something about why I think your work is so important -- you preserve the form while updating the perspective/time (I hope that makes sense - the form is mostly traditional but the content is modern). For me, that adds a new dimension to your work and you as a poet (wordsmith): you are not a man of the past, but a modern man speaking through disciplined form.

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James Hart's avatar

I really appreciate that, Johan! That is actually something I'm trying to achieve with poetry—show how myths, verse, stories and imagination are more relevant and needed now than they've ever been. We need expression, community and vibrance in a world that can be so clinical, isolated, and devoid of color if we're not careful. I'm so glad you got something out of it and thanks so much for telling me so!

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

You certainly took me on a strange journey through All Hallow’s Eve, James. I will be reading this again tomorrow (with the lights on).

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James Hart's avatar

hahah certainly understandable! Thanks a ton for reading, Paul, and hope you enjoyed it.

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Paul Wittenberger's avatar

I live alone in an old house that sometimes creaks and shudders during the night.

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MJ Biggs's avatar

Beautiful! Nice work, James.

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James Hart's avatar

Thanks, MJ! Love a good scary story for Halloween. :) I haven't seen nearly as many this month as I would have liked, so hopefully I can catch up this weekend.

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John Toma | NOSTALGIA NATION's avatar

Loved this poem, nicely done, James!

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James Hart's avatar

Thanks, John! What’s Halloween without a creepy story or two?

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erniet's avatar

Nice! This was a really fun read!

Now I'm struck trying to figure out who she is!😁

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James Hart's avatar

Hey, glad you liked it!

There are clues in the text, if you wanna follow ‘em up. :)

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erniet's avatar

I think some of them mislead…my first impression was a goddess from Irish mythology (you’re title is similar to her name 😉)….especially the crows…but the description got me going back to my Greek mythology (a little gal with scissors to be precise)…

But ambiguity is good!😁

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James Hart's avatar

Yep, you’re pickin’ ‘em up just fine. Very well done. :) It's indeed a mix of a few stories.

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Mark Rico's avatar

"My name means rust. It means decline,

The Faded Light, the Trailing Breath—

When visiting the West, your kind

Has called me Living Death."

What a vivid way of telling a secret yet keeping the mystery intact!

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James Hart's avatar

Thanks a ton, Mark! This was indeed a lot of fun to put together.

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Zane Paxton's avatar

This one hit! I loved the characterization, and how you utilized a full sensory experience, not just visual description.

Very gripping!

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James Hart's avatar

Thanks, Zane! Really appreciate your careful reading. Glad you found it worthwhile!

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Marian L Thorpe's avatar

Wondefrul - and the ending lines are superb!

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James Hart's avatar

Thanks, Marian! I freaking love this time of year, and I’m a big fan of the metaphysical poets, who really brought it when it came to Halloween poems. Figured I’d have a little go myself.

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Bonita Jewel's avatar

Awesome poem! Loved it!

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James Hart's avatar

Thanks so much, Bonita! Glad you enjoyed it!

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